Tuesday, February 3, 2009

The Heroic Flaw- The Cornerstone of Story Conflict

Even as a kid, I knew Heroes had flaws. I didn't understand why, but I could see them.

Superman- I thought was kind of lame. I didn't believe in his super powers, which I thought were ridiculous, but Kryptonite that could disable him? That was stupid. And what was really obvious was, that wasn't his flaw. His flaw was that he was too afraid to admit he loved Lois Lane. Superman afraid? He was too afraid someone would discover his secret identity. Why? Did he think Clark Kent would lose his job? Come on, the man could have married Lois and they could have had twenty kids. He could protect whole cities, couldn't he? But he couldn't protect his family? He could speed around the planet so fast, he could make the days go backward, and he couldn't protect his loved ones? What a cop out!

Now, the Lone Ranger was different. And besides, he rode Silver. But what the heck was he protecting with his mask? His silver mine? Maybe he thought he'd get arrested for impersonating a Texas Ranger. But at least I could see some mystique to him, and imagine those distant cabins in the hills where he rode off into the sunset to be until he was needed again.

He wasn't afraid of women- not like the guy in blue tights.

Or was he? Maybe he was more like my brothers and just didn't have time for them.

That was a flaw, too. But I think I was starting to get it. A man like TLR was just waiting for the right woman to come along- he just didn't know it yet.

The failure in Superman's flaw, and that of so many other Super Heroes, was that it was external. Kryptonite. It didn't touch the emotions. There was fear, of course, and was really unmanly in my estimation back then. I'm okay with a guy fearing for those he loves, but not when it enervates him. Superman was just using that as an excuse for his real fear- WOMEN. That's, to me, just a guy with muscles. Not a Hero.

I didn't know back then that I was developing my concept of the Romantic Hero, who doesn't need the stupid jumping-tall-buildings stuff to be heroic. But he does need flaws. And he does need to find within himself whatever it takes to overcome them. And he needs a heroine to help him find his strength. Conversely, he needs to do the same for her.

The conflict that makes a romance a riveting read begins with the flaws, continues with the struggle to protect them and the fight against them and culminates with victory over them.

The flaws have to be strong enough and dangerous enough to threaten the outcome of the story. But at the same time, an unheroic flaw can kill a story faster than anything. Back to our Superman/Lone Ranger analogy: He can love his freedom and independence so much, he doesn't want to give up any part of it, but he can't be afraid of women. That's not worth my time. For one thing, a guy like that will never change, and he'll be constantly on the offensive against her, to protect himself. Sort of like the sand box kid who yelled, "Mommie! She hit me back first!"

But I do love a Wounded Hero- because we all are wounded in some way.

Here, I'm using three of the four clips of my skyscraper ad for APHRODITE'S BREW to demonstrate my point. I'm working right now to condense these three into one message for the reverse side of my bookmark, and you'll see why in a minute, as it also demonstrates my premise of flaw as cornerstone to story conflict.

Val in APHRODITE'S BREW is one of those. He has a strong surface. He's re-built his scar into something he knows how to live with. But he doesn't know how to get to the next step, and his experience has taught him he doesn't want to go that far. Here's a man who suffered a serious wound in the form of the wife who never loved him and then betrayed him, leaving him with a legacy and a moral dilemma in the form of a child who wasn't his. Like a lot of men in his time, he had plenty of social skills, but was missing the one about how to love. And like my imaginary vision of the Lone Ranger, he secretly hungered for the woman who knew how to teach him what he was missing.

In this story, both hero and heroine had essentially the same flaw and conflict, but for different reasons. That's unusual, but it worked for me this time. Sylvia understood and had worked through the second step in her grieving process, but had stopped there. I've thought it interesting in reading reviews on this book, that some reviewers didn't recognize that both of them were essentially dealing with significant loss although others did. Often, people who have never suffered losses that were vital to them have a simple solution- Get over it. But most of us know it's simply not that simple. Significant loss of loved ones changes our lives and we have to work through it. That's the real conflict in this story, not the love potion or fear of marriage or anything external.

Are you noticing it's sometimes hard to tell the flaws from the strengths? That's because they really are the same thing. They're like a coin with two sides. On the obverse, the strength is visible, and on the reverse it's the weakness you see. In this case, Val's basic strength is his inner kindness and moral structure. He dealt with the betrayal honorably because he could not do otherwise. But his strength, his honor and morality, made him vulnerable to betrayal and scarred his chance to learn how to love. Will he conquer his weak side by using his strong side? That's the real story question, not just for Val, but for all romance heroes.

Val is no coward. He doesn't just find a way to use his scars. No, he has to challenge them- test to see if he can put himself in the path of danger and repel it. I think there's something in him that knows he has a "weakness", a desire for something he can't identify, that threatens the new autonomy of permanent bachelorhood which he has decided is his solution. So he has to constantly be testing it, flaunting his strength over his weakness, to prove to himself he can't be caught in the marriage trap.

Enter Heroine, Sylvia. Enter Romantic Conflict, the battle to prove Val either right or wrong-- or perhaps both. So in these three clips, you see the story beginning: External clues lead to and showcase the internal conflict, and show you how this battle will be fought:

"An odd blue bottle... A funny-looking locket... A bewitching pair of silver-green eyes... Lead to a sneaky love potion that spells doom to the bachelors of the Ton. Especially the one who thinks he can't be caught."

What do I have there? The famed/cursed Elevator Pitch. The High Concept. The BLURB!

Why? Because it leads straight to the crux of the story, the conflict. And the conflict clearly points to its base, the Heroic Flaw.

Give it a try. You not only can find a strong base for your hero's inner conflict based on his character with its strength and converse weakness, but you quickly get the synthesis of your story into an intriguing short blurb.. Your promo is designed before you even begin!

Gee, I wish I'd known that before I started the story!


  1. Hi Delle - I liked how you developed from the flaw to your blurb! Are we supposed to try that too? Not sure that's up my alley since I am a reader not a writer! But I love flawed (therefore human) heroes. I agree that Superman was a dud in my book. I like integrity and humor even in the dark, tortured hero.

  2. Hi Martha! I love to have readers here! Although this was more for authors in a way, to help them develop better stories, it would be great for readers, too.

    Did you ever try to tell someone else about a story you'd read, and find yourself going on and on, running through every detail of the plot, yet still feeling like you weren't getting your point across? What if you had a better way of concentrating the story so you could get the point across quickly?

    If you want to grasp a story, get to its true heart, you can look at your hero and heroine with this formula. I think it's less true for non-romance stories, but for almost all romances, there will be a core of conflict, something inside both hero and heroine, that is in need of growth in order to make the fully committed relationship that develops by the end. A hero and heroine with no flaws make a dud of a book. But if you look for and find their flaws, you will also see their strengths, and can see what they bring to a story to make it happen.

    So have you got a book you'd like to analyze this way? We can give it a go if you want.

  3. Oh thanks Delle! -
    (BTW I did figure out how to get to the contest too! I don't do my space or face book so if you have an alternative can you send to me? I did comment on the pics and that was fun!) mesreads [at] gmail [dot] com

    Good idea here for me to work with. I read/listen to about 15 - 18 books a month. And I have to keep track not to repeat - I started in 2001 keeping Word doc but 2 years ago I got Readerware and keep track on that. Plus I do mini type reviews for bookreporter to try to win some more books (which DH would say I need like hole in head! HA!) I won a Kindle at end of December and am waiting for that so I can read my pdfs quicker. Hard to take the laptop to the private throne room or bed! LOL.

    On vacation right now in Mexico. Just read a very simple romance - Trick my Truck (L McLane) and now reading a J Cresswell Romantic Suspense. Then a J Barnett historical romance. So give me a day or so to work with the formula and I'll see how it comes out. Where shall I send it?
    You know this is weird.... I'm an attorney and this shouldn't make me nervous but it does. LOL - out of comfort zone right! But I'm finding internet book friends and they are warm and encouraging!
    Another BTW - I love the sound/premise of Aphrodite's Brew. Its going on my TBP/TBR list!!

  4. I love discussing heroes and their flaws and you did a great job of it.

  5. Hi Delle,
    I may be a little late in joining the party. I just found it from Emily Bryan's post which led me to Heather's Musings and then you. Val sounds like a wonderful hero. What a heart wrenching line: 'he secretly hungered for the woman who knew how to teach him what he was missing.' Love it!!

  6. BTW, I see your note about your son-in-law. Please tell him thank you for having the courage to go into law enforcement. And thank your daughter!!

  7. Thank you, Julie! I adore Val. He can be a bit imperious at times, but I think he does that to impress us with his rational detachment. He won't admit it, of course. And since I know his future (which I haven' written yet) I see Val's great depth, which is rooted in his decision to step beyond his comfort zone and grow to be who he needs to be. But more on that some other time.

    And thanks, re my SIL. I hope to get a blog up about him tomorrow, but I have no pictures- sigh!

  8. Sorry to comment years too late, but....

    You never figured out that old Superman was for 8 year old boys? You didn't come to realize that modern (2012 now) heroes do show a serious and intimate look at inner demons, at least since The Silver Surfer's arrival in the 1960's?

    It's business, to tell stories that are sell-able. But anyone and everyone has a good story to share. I think that's from the local 12-step meeting in every local little anywhere, or down in the bowels of the White House. I recommend three hours of "Hidden City" on Travel Channel with novelist Marcus Sakey, then call me some film noir morning. But I fear, you are gone already!

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    Delle Jacobs said...
    I wasn't a boy, Drew. I ran with the boys, fought with wooden swords with the boys, but I wasn't one. Of course I didn't get it, any more than they got my romantic notions of heroes.

    Yes, all my stories are quite modern in that way, even though they must be set in times long past when nobody ever heard of Freud and those who came after him. I always write romance, and also make it as historically accurate as I can (pure historical accuracy is impossible because even the words themselves alter history). And none of my heroes and heroines make it through the story without growing into a better person. It's romance, and it's formulaic in that way. But I had all the noir I wanted in my life in all those years I worked with troubled families. Now I like to see people triumph over the dark side.

    So you are right, I'm long gone! And happy about it. And so are my readers. And I hope you enjoy your adventure/story, too.


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